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DARK AND BRIGHT

Author: 
eduar
EDUAR TAVERAS              4/1/08


                         DARK AND BRIGHT




IT WAS BRIGHT AND SUNNY
NICE AND WARM.
BUT IN THE INSIDE IT WAS DARK AND COLD
I WAS IN HELL.
IT WAS TOO BRIGHT AND IT WAS HOT
AND I HEARD SCREAMING  AND WHINING,
YELLING AND MUMBLING: IT WAS HELL. A
ND HOW DID I GET HERE ?
I DON'T KNOW WHY AM I HERE/
I DON'T KNOW.
I JUST WAN'T TO LEAVE
AND I HEARD "WAKE-UP! IT'S TIME TO GO TO SCHOOL!"
AND I WAS SO HAPPY
BUT I WAS THINKING
WHAT IF THAT HAPPENED?  



                                       BY: EDUAR

                                       FOR: THE VIEWERS

Comments

Eduar, This is great. I put

Eduar,

This is great. I put your lines in a slightly different format - I hope you don't mind. Let me know what you think. You can always edit this later or put up a new version.

Keep writing!

-Mr. Mackert

Eduar, how intense and

Eduar, how intense and serious! i felt momentarily trapped too! And then your ending made it seem like you were almost not out. Great job, I want to hear more.
JT