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The first day of school

Author: 
amir_sullivan
  The first day of school,a kid thought he was cool and pushed my coat on the floor,Not knowing what I can do,I pushed him and hit him too and he didn't bother me no more.His name was ricky and his hands were sticky because his fingers were all up his nose. And then I met my friend. His name was J.P his real name, John Paul and he's my best friend of all, my teacher was ms.miller, my para was fuentes, I didn't like him at all but she sure was tall. 

Comments

Amir, You have a style all

Amir,

You have a style all your own. This poem also reveals that you are a natural story-teller. Did you show JP this poem? I'm sure he'd be honored to read it.

Looking forward to more,

Mr. Mackert

Dear Amir, this is

Dear Amir, this is fantastic! One of our first rhyming poets that unfolded a quirky and fun to listen to story! You certainly have talent. Please, write on.
JT